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From: Lawrence Krauss To: "jeffrey E." <[email protected]> Cc: Lawrence Krauss Subject: Fwd: sorry.. a new version Confidential Date: Sun, 04 Mar 2018 20:06:37 +0000 Attachments: Krauss Statement3 edited-2.docx Inline-Images: image002.png Finally some very constructive help from a source in addition to you. Keridwen is a friend from Phoenix who was editor of Phoenix Magazine and has been a joumalist for many years, and who offered to help if I was writing a statement. Anyway, there are many good points here. I thought I would send this to you in confidence, because I know a number of the recommendations here resonate with your thoughts... today is not a bad day so far.. yesterday was. Happily Steve Pinker is happily coming to Origins and has agreed to moderate the public panel I was planning on moderating. anyway, Nancy and I are working away on this for the moment. Feeling less pressure to release, you will be happy to know. Lawrence Lawrence M. Krauss Director, The Origins Project at ASU Co-Director, Cosmology initiative Foundation Professor School of Earth & Space Exploration and Physics Department Arizona State University Tempe, AZ 85287= Research Office: I Assistant Origins Office Origins Project 10 Year Celebration Be a part of something 10 years in the making! April 5-9th 2018 - Visit for more info Begin forwarded message: From: Keridwen Subject: Re: sorry.. a new version Confidential Date: March 4, 2018 at 9:12:49 AM PST To: Lawrence Krauss tc )' Reply-To: Keridwen EFTA00868927 Attached are my comments and edits. Your first version says many good things, though many things can be significantly improved, and I make those suggestions. You will see that throughout, I make comments like "this sentence implies/conveys/sounds like..." When I do that, I am not suggesting that this is what you are thinking or that this is what occurred; I am saying that this is how it may well be interpreted by the public, based upon my knowledge of psychology and my awareness of the emotional flavor of every word in the English language. Below the text with my comments, I present a clean version that is what I think you should say. It removes or rephrases damning statements and words, and makes you sound like a better and more believable person. I also corrected the grammatical and spelling errors, not only because that is what I do but because sloppy grammar implies unclear and frustrated thinking, whereas perfect grammar implies you are calm and rational. I made my edits within the second version purely because the first version had so many colors and track changes in it that it would have been confusing. But let me be clear: The second version is a career death warrant. We will discuss this more in person, but for now, you absolutely must take out everything that says the incidents as described in the Buzzfeed article do not constitute sexual harassment. I cannot state this firmly enough. As for when to release the statement, I do not have enough information to advise you on that since I do not know what you're hearing from ASU, particularly with regard to the imminent/delayed/canceled (?) 10th anniversary events. I will say that the quality and sincerity of the statement is far more important than the timing, since this is your one chance to save your career. EFTA00868928